Cats and Dogs

Thanks to Madison Woods for posting the prompt, and for the photo by Stacy Plowright, and the Friday Fictioneers for the great stories.  Crit very welcome.

Cats and Dogs

Anna always thought twice about getting in a lift with a man.  But it was nine flights of stairs.  She’d been away all day and her greyhound hated storms.

The lights dimmed.

Silence.

After 8 minutes he’d taken off his jacket, revealing huge arms that bristled with tattoos.  Not many men made her feel small, but with him she felt like a kitten trapped in a cage with a Rottweiler.

When he sat down on the floor, after 53 minutes, she began to relax.

After 2 hours and 47 minutes, the door finally opened.

Neither of them got out.

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31 thoughts on “Cats and Dogs

  1. Dear Rachel,

    This story was mesmerizing. Countdown, menace, claustrophobia, fear. You packed a great deal into a tight space (100 words and the elevator.) The best you saved for last, though. Is it love? Were they locked in each others arms and more? Or had something far more sinister happened? A very good story this weekend.

    For the record, I’ve been stuck in an elevator (with 13 other sailors) and the experience was not fun. Took about that long to get out and I think about it from time to time when I’m in an elevator.

    Thanks for visiting my story.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    • Doug! A pleasure to see you here. 🙂 I am so amused by your story of the sailors I’m chuckling here at my desk in leafy Hertfordshire. Thank you for your very kind comments. I enjoyed yours, as always.

    • Doug took the words from my mouth (or keyboard)! You left me wondering. Doug, with 13 other sailors? Really? NOT fun and I hope it was a larger-than-usual elevator or you guys got to know each other way too well!!! 🙂

    • Thank you very much Sandra – I’m guessing one way or another she eventually sorted the dog out!

      I really enjoyed your post this week. Your succinct, self-contained story was definitely a model for this one. You’ll be seeing more of me on your blog – following. Thanks very much for dropping by!

  2. I love this! The suspense builds so smoothly as you tell us how long they’ve been trapped. And “a kitten trapped in a cage with a Rottweiler” is a great description. I was very concerned about what was going to happen to Anna by the end – though I tend to think that she’s changed her opinion of him and neither one of them wants to leave by the time the doors open. (If he had done something awful to Anna, he would leave and she wouldn’t. I hope.) Good job.

  3. I love your description of “him”… I also wonder about the end. Either she experienced the hottest sex she ever had or ended up dead. I got stuck in a 60 floor, office bldg., elevator one day and had the worst panic attack. I’m 29 on the list.

    • Oh Lora! I think 60th your floor elevator nightmare is enough to freak anyone out – not surprising you paniced. You weren’t with Doug and the sailors were you? 😉 I enjoyed the twist at the end of yours as well. Thanks so much for your comment.

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